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Eleven

 

Ideas

I can relate to this. This is about a girl called Rachel and she is 11. On her birthday at school she has a situation about a red sweater that wasn’t her’s. At the time being she wishes that she had been older in this situation so she would know how to deal with this and speak up.

“Today I wish I was one hundred and two instead of eleven because if I was one hundred and two I’d have known what to say”

This was a very interesting idea because I am 11 and I don’t feel different at all. I mean I have learnt more more but I still feel like I am 10.

 

How did she come up with this idea?

Is this a true story?

 

Organization

I thought it was a very interesting way to set out a story. So first it kind of starts in her head and she is talking, then it starts talking about a red sweater and how it is not her’s but the teacher is accusing her that it is her’s because someone dobbed her in.

“ if I was one hundred and two I’d have known what to say when Mrs. Price put the red sweater on my desk. I would’ve known how to tell her it wasn’t mine”

 

Why did she lay it out that way?

Why did she chose a red sweater?

 

Voice

I think this story would have been directed more towards 9-12 yr because it is saying that even if your 9, 10,11 or 12 maybe higher you will always have a piece of you from when you are little.

“when you’re eleven, you’re also ten, and nine, and eight, and seven, and six, and five, and four, and three, and two, and one.”

 

 

 

Word Choice

The words in this text were very familiar to me so if I were to say it in tier 1,2 or 3 I would say it is tier 2 because there were very familiar words but there not to easy. It also use some metaphors and similes.

 

“ you grow old is kind of like an onion or like the rings inside a tree trunk or like my little wooden dolls that fit one inside the other, each year inside the next one.”

Why did she chose to use easy but not to challenging words?

 

Sentence Fluency

In Eleven  there are lots of short and long sentences and for some of the long sentences it took like 2 or 3 lines for one idea to be explained probably

Short

“Maybe she’s feeling three.”

Long

” you grow old is kind of like an onion or like the rings inside a tree trunk or like my little wooden dolls that fit one inside the other, each year inside the next one.”

 

Conventions

 

Punctuation

She mainly used commas, full stops and talking marks in her writing. She did use question marks and apostrophes but not as much as the first 3.

“That’s not, I don’t, you’re not…Not mine,” I finally say in a little voice that was maybe me when I was four.”

Grammar and spelling

Her grammar was very accurate and the same for spelling she was very wise about her word choice and her spelling was also very good.

 

 

More Funding for Public and Private Schools BTN

Insights.Recalls.Quetion

Recalls

That the schools are not getting enough funding to pay for their buildings and equipment.

Public schools get payed more from the government and private schools get payed more from the federal government.

Public schools get more money from the government while private school don’t get payed as much because the parents pay more to go their so they use the money the parents/guardians give for the child to go to the school.

Insight

the government should listen to what the schools need.

Questions

why isn’t the government giving to schools the money they need?

why does the federal government give money to the private schools instead of the public?

 

The Rain the Horror…..

That rain caused so many problems……

And I was there to see it all happen. I didn’t want to be there to see it, but I was and so yeah, and I will tell you how and what happened……

It was a normal, well I would say normal if that means the popular group is making fun of the nerds again. Then detention kids are making more trouble than usual then, yeah, that is normal.

Then there’s me, a girl who just sits in the corner of the class reading a book in peace and quiet where no one will distract me, not even my friend’s do you want to know why because I DON’T HAVE ANY!!!!!

Any way that would really just be my day, reading and sitting in the back of the class. If it was lunch I would go in the cleaner’s closet and read, ahhh… the memories. The teacher slaps the ruler on the table. “Miss Bluewood would you like to tell me why you are still reading that, that book?” “Umm because it’s a nice book,” I said very scared.

And then that’s when it happened the rain the horror. I don’t even want to tell you, actually you know what, I won’t tell you.

Even if you are begging me really hard I won’t tell you, hang on did you say chocolate I mean I will do anything for choco… wait are you trying to tell me what happened by giving me chocolate? Well it is working, oh fine I will tell you.

Ok so as I said I was reading my book when Miss Judejohnstone interrupted me. “Well Miss Bluewood I am waiting.” “ahhh umm Geo…rge Wash..in..ton cre..ated th..e fir..st,” “I don’t want to hear it,” Miss Judejohnstone said in a mean and angry way.

Finally, the class was over, the down side was that I was in put in detention. Normally I would be happy because I can read in peace and quiet, but all the detention kids were in here. And the worst thing was I had to spend 3 hours in here with them.

 

3 hours later….

Oh My God…. I don’t think I could last another minute longer with those boys. I got home and my mum was so scared she thought I got kidnapped, so I explained why I was late.

Then the next day when I was at school, I tried to forget about detention and when Miss Judejohnstone yelled at me. Anyway, I went on as usual and went in the cleaner’s closet to read.

Then it was time for class and it was my favourite subject, but guess who was teaching it, Miss Judejohnstone. Ahhh and I thought this day couldn’t get any worst.

And then it happened. The rain, the horror. I was about to scream but if I did, water would have gone in my mouth. And then…..

To be continued……

 

 

 

 

 

btn weedy sea dragon

only 15k from Sydney is dragon territory. the weedy sea dragon is one of the listed endangered animals. these cool looking animals live in seaweed because they loved to drift with it.

but now scientist say that because of climate change, these wonderful animals may become excitant forever. so they have told other scientist around Australia to take a picture whenever they see them. because each dragon has its own unique design on it.

so maybe the next time you go to work or school maybe think of taking your bike instead of your car, to help reduce climate change and to help save these awesome animals.

My graph

LG: I can use Excel to create graphs that meaningfully displays given data.

click the graph if it is unclear

3 people played 1 sport

14 people played 2 sports

1 person played 3 sports

4 people played 4 sports

1 person played 5 sports

I chose this graph because it showed the data the best and it is simple and complicated to read. This graph shows how many sports or activities people from my class are doing. So as you can see most people in my class do 2 sports/activities in a week, and the lowest amount of sports someone did was 5.

BTN War Animals

When you think of the word war you think of people who have given there lives in order to save someone else’s. but did you know that animals also went to the war as well…..

They were mainly used for communication because they didn’t have much and the soldiers couldn’t walk a cross the field to tell someone something without getting killed. So they trained animals to take the messages a cross the field quickly and safe. they would normally use animals like:

Dogs

and birds

Dog were used more to smell if there were bombs in the area, but were also used to send messages a cross to one an other. Birds and especially pigeons, they would attach a little plastic cylinder on there feet and put the message inside.

So remember the next time you think of the word war just remember that it wasn’t just people that gave there lives animals did to.

100 word challenge

Today it was the day me and my mum go the museum. I was really excited to go I couldn’t wait to see the crocodile.

At the incredible zoo

We are walking in the hallway to the reptiles. I look around me the walls are wide and bright orange, I see the crocodiles within a cage. I am about to go up to see it when I hear a cracking sound, the walls collapsed on the crocodile and died. I am really sad that the crocodile dies. I run to my mum and I say “lucky that wasn’t me mum.”

My Goldfish

My Goldfish

 

 

 

“Hey, hey you, yeah you, pay attention to me, hello?”

“Wh, wh who’s there?”

“Ahhh…me…..duh.”

“What?”

“Ok so this is how it goes, I am your pet goldfish called Goldie ok, good so I have some things to talk with you about.”

“Like what?”

“Ok, so the first thing is that my water is filthy! I mean can you not at least clean it once or twice a week you clean it every year.”

“Yeah, ok so what is the big deal?”

“What’s the big, what’s the big…..uh doesn’t matter.”

“So on to the next thing.”

“Wait there’s more!”

“Ah yeah. Ok the second thing is the tank is too boring! Can you at lease put something in my blow to make it more fun?”

“Yeah ok I am going to the shops right now I can get you something like table tennis games or whatever.”

“Ok.”

1 hour later

(Owner comes back from the shops.)

“Oh come on I forgot sorry,”

“O, M, G!!!!!!!!”

“But I did get some chips if you wanted any?”

Uniform VS no uniform

We should diffidently stop uniforms because…..

Firstly it’s coasting to much and we need the money for other things for our school like our school equipment and maths tools because we barely have any.

Secondly if we stop the uniforms the school will look brighter and more unique. It is also easier to identify someone with their own cloths.

This is why we should not have uniforms, it coasts to much, we need the money for things at the school and lastly it’s going to be more colorful and unique.

This is why we think we should have no uniforms,

Thank you

Power to make laws for all!

Ladies & Gentlemen

It has come to my attention that men have been given more rights than women, for example it is illegal for women to vote for federation.

Women should the equal rights and terms to men, because all we have to do is cook, clean and wait for our husbands to get home from work.

Us women only have rights to logically be involved in the constitutional rights of women is to occupy the British throne, but yet we are in Australia.

So if you are with me make a start to equal rights for women and men.

Thank You