100 word challenge

OMG look at all that chocolate  i wonder where we should hide all of it so mum doesn’t see it.

“the cupboard”  nah she will see it

” the washing basket”   she will still see it

“i know our bellies”

that is a great idea everyone eat eat before my mum comes home.

 

Ding Dong

mums home everyone hide.

“hello i am home anyone here i have cookies”

yay cookies i can’t wait to eat them.

 

wait a second i am full from all that chocolate i just ate oh well guess i have to est them another day

Bye Bye.

6 Comments on 100 word challenge

  1. alexia2016
    November 19, 2017 at 2:41 pm (3 months ago)

    Hi em,
    The concept of this story is great (: really funny 😃😉😄😁😁.
    But there are a lot punctuation errors (No capital letters at the start of a sentence, NO CAPITAL I WHEN SPEAKING ABOUT YOURSELF + your missing some full stops)

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  2. emilyx2016
    November 23, 2017 at 10:45 am (3 months ago)

    hey sorry i was rushing it
    em

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  3. alexia2016
    November 23, 2017 at 10:51 am (3 months ago)

    (: Lexi here,
    No capital in your reply and no capital for your name ( no full stop to).

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  4. emilyx2016
    November 23, 2017 at 10:52 am (3 months ago)

    ……………… AHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!

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  5. alexia2016
    November 23, 2017 at 10:53 am (3 months ago)

    Lexi here,
    Sorry…

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  6. emilyx2016
    November 23, 2017 at 10:54 am (3 months ago)

    Sorry

    Reply

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